[寫作指導] 文學分析：愛情 Love｜潤稿 Copyediting｜學生作品成果 Writing Clinic
A.S.J. Tessimond - Black Monday Lovesong
In love's dances, in love's dances
One retreats and one advances.
One grows warmer and one colder,
One more hesitant, one bolder.
One gives what the other needed
Once, or will need, now unheeded.
One is clenched, compact, ingrowing
While the other's melting, flowing.
One is smiling and concealing
While the other's asking, kneeling.
One is arguing or sleeping
While the other's weeping, weeping.
And the question finds no answer
And the tune misleads the dancer
And the lost look finds no other
And the lost hand finds no brother
And the word is left unspoken
Till the theme and thread are broken.
When shall these divisions alter?
Echo's answer seems to falter:
"Oh the unperplexed, unvexed time
Next time...one day...one day...next time!"
In the poem, the poet conveys the difficulty during a love relationship through the usages of contrast and imagery of the dance between the two partners. The endless conflict of the couple, one with the anxious attachment style and the other with the avoidant one, harms the relationship. The difficulty to communicate is well presented with the line, “One grows warmer and one colder”. A passionate partner is always “warmer” for reassurance when the “colder” one never respond, but ends up retreating. The problematic relationship is also captured by the imagery, “the tune misleads the dancer.” The thundering mistake for the love dance also increases the difficulty in the relationship, leading the couple to nowhere.
However, the poet also conveys some slim hope through rhythm and structure. The rhyme, in the beginning, comes in two lines to show the very special bonds between the couple. Although it has changed into a disturbing relationship with the same rhyme from line 7 to line 12, the last stanza swirls back to the rhyme with two sentences to reveal their tendency to love again. This particular relationship may be destructive, but they are not discouraged by the hardship and still look for “the one”.
What we need to be careful about in the poem is the irony in the last stanza: the hope itself for love is a difficulty for the protagonists. The impact the last stanza makes on the reader conveys people’s blind optimism toward being able to find another relationship, without making any improvements, not realizing that one of the greatest obstacles in the relationship is themselves. This shows that it is exactly the blind hope they have toward the next relationship that results in the difficulties in all the other ones.
In love's dances, in love's dances
One retreats and one advances.
One grows warmer and one colder,
One more hesitant, one bolder.
One gives what the other needed
Once, or will need, now unheeded.
One is clenched, compact, ingrowing
While the other's melting, flowing.
One is smiling and concealing
While the other's asking, kneeling.
One is arguing or sleeping
While the other's weeping, weeping.
And the question finds no answer
And the tune misleads the dancer
And the lost look finds no other
And the lost hand finds no brother
And the word is left unspoken
Till the theme and thread are broken.
When shall these divisions alter?
Echo's answer seems to falter:
"Oh the unperplexed, unvexed time
Next time...one day...one day...next time!"
In the poem, the poet conveys the difficulty during a love relationship through the usages of contrast and imagery of the dance between the two partners. The endless conflict of the couple, one with the anxious attachment style and the other with the avoidant one, harms the relationship. The difficulty to communicate is well presented with the line, “One grows warmer and one colder”. A passionate partner is always “warmer” for reassurance when the “colder” one never respond, but ends up retreating. The problematic relationship is also captured by the imagery, “the tune misleads the dancer.” The thundering mistake for the love dance also increases the difficulty in the relationship, leading the couple to nowhere.
However, the poet also conveys some slim hope through rhythm and structure. The rhyme, in the beginning, comes in two lines to show the very special bonds between the couple. Although it has changed into a disturbing relationship with the same rhyme from line 7 to line 12, the last stanza swirls back to the rhyme with two sentences to reveal their tendency to love again. This particular relationship may be destructive, but they are not discouraged by the hardship and still look for “the one”.
What we need to be careful about in the poem is the irony in the last stanza: the hope itself for love is a difficulty for the protagonists. The impact the last stanza makes on the reader conveys people’s blind optimism toward being able to find another relationship, without making any improvements, not realizing that one of the greatest obstacles in the relationship is themselves. This shows that it is exactly the blind hope they have toward the next relationship that results in the difficulties in all the other ones.
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